Sci-fi, Need Feedback – What Do You Think? Would You Keep Reading?
I’m editing this chapter and I’m working on the tension. Tell me if you’d keep reading and if not then tell me why. Just tell me what you think about it. Thanks!
Ronin heard the beeping of the keypad outside her locked room. The nurse would be entering and she would be ready to scream and fight if something out of the ordinary happened. She clinched her fists under her covers and waited. The real nurse had a routine, and she would see if she kept to it.
“Good morning,” said the nurse with a bright smile as she opened the door and walked over to her. Ronin said nothing as she kept her eyes firmly on the nurse. “I have breakfast for you.” The nurse raised the portable counter and put the breakfast tray on it. She whipped the tray toward the patient’s chest, still smiling her sunny smile. “Do you wanna watch TV?” The nurse picked the remote control off the floor and started flipping through the channels until she came to a PG-rated movie, and then sat the remote by the Ronin’s hand.
Relief went through Ronin’s body as her muscles relaxed. The nurse was predictable and confident she was still human.
“I’ll check on you later when it’s time for your medicine.” The nurse left, waiting for the click of the door before she walked down the hall.
Ronin took the tray and flung it across the room where it crashed against the colorful stained wall and made a rattling noise as it fell to the floor, the juice spilling everywhere. She took the remote, turned off the TV, and then tossed it on the floor beside the bed. She stared at the walls and ceiling where the TV hung high, comfortable in the silence. Silence was great because it meant no one was there to kill her for what she had done two years earlier.
“Get off me!” screamed a woman’s voice. The commotion from the halls seeped through the thin walls as if they were in the room fighting. Ronin listened as nurses struggled to get the patient under control as she shouted obscenities at them. Thumps against the wall reverberated to Ronin’s bed as she tossed and turned trying to get the sounds out of her head. What if the patient was one of them and trying to break into her room? Objects smashed into the floor as the shouting got louder and more voices were heard. Grunts flowed softly through the door, and then sudden silence followed by heavy breathing. The patient had been subdued. The hospital had seen the best and worst of people, and sometimes exacerbated the worst in them.
When someone got out of control it became a wrestling match to see who could get the upper-hand, and the heavy, bulky nurses always won – even the women. The patient was usually subdued with hand enclosures, taken to their room, and strapped to their bed. Ronin knew this all too well when it happened to her once when she tried to run for the exit. Since then she had been on her best behavior and had been a model patient.
She got up and looked out the doubled-enforced window. Her view overlooked the courtyard where patients and nurses were smoking and talking. Below her was the hospital’s Leisure Room where patients spent personal time enjoying the company of others, including hospital staff. She kept telling herself that no alien in its right mind would want to spend a day living with these people. That thought always gave her satisfaction to carry on with her day.
She watched as Jonny Rooker sat by himself on a bench by a tree rocking back and forth and talking to himself as usual. She let out a soft chuckle as she thought about Jonny’s nickname – Rockin’ Rooker.
A few feet from Jonny, Louise and Gabrielle played their daily hand of poker for snack coupons that were given to patients for good behavior. When Louise lost, she became angry and threw the cards on the ground, and Louise was losing the game. She pounded her fist on the table and shouted at Gabrielle, her eyebrows sloping downward, intensifying her already tense features. In a few moments she would end the game the only way she knew how.
How Do I Know He Likes Me Or Not? Does He?
Ok, so I like this guy at school, and I told him a couple months ago. Ever since then he has been acting different around me (in a good way). He is in my homeroom, which is good. We switch seats every month and it just so happens, the teacher puts me right next to him. We always would talk, and he would get really close to me, like he would sit on the edge of the chair like not even an inch away from me. Then one day, i had my hair down and straightened (for no special reason) and it was really soft and shiny. So then out of no where he starts touching my hair and he says “Wow your hair is really soft.” It was kind of awkward because I’m not the real flirty type, but I really really liked it
. In science class, he sits on the other side of the walkway sort of in front and diagonal from me. I ALWAYS find him looking at me. As soon as I see him looking, he looks away. But only sometimes. His eyes look desperate when he does keep looking though. When I’m standing with a couple of friends, he goes out of his way to be by me. But when people ask him if he likes me he says I don’t know. Now just recently someone asked him if he likes me, and he said no. People still try to ask him, but he says no don’t ask me like he doesn’t want to tell anyone. All the people that knows I like him, thinks he likes me too. I am soooooooooo confused! Do you think he likes me?
Can You Name Some Soft Butch Movie And Tv Stars? What Makes Soft Butches So Attractive?
i am a straight girly girl who has this weird thing for soft butches and i have no clue why. my three fav soft butch celebrities are christina cox, Ellen Page, and Nicki Aycox. is it wrong for a straight 15 year old girl to have crushes on women in their mid to late 30s?
So What Should I End Up Doing Anyway?
See, there used to be a guy that I liked last year, but several factors held me back. He was not a handsome person, but he was goodnatured looking and pretty average. However, his intellectual capacity and the subject of his conversation didn’t seem to be on par with me, and I sometimes felt that he was ignorant on several areas and easily jealous. He didn’t get into university like me; he got into college. He was good at sports, which was the only thing that I was bad at. I liked his down to earth humanity, simplicity, humor, and there was something real, and geniune about him. He was soft hearted, had alot of integrity, but was also amazingly strong. There was a fallout between me and him; partly because I swore at him over the phone because some of his friends had apparently hacked my computer and researched personal info about me without my consent. It enraged me and I felt betrayed because it felt more like his affection towards me was one of selfish self indulgence. It was as if he expected me to cater to his needs and likings in order to be “perfect”. Another reason was that he scared me with his ability to handle firearms (he wanted to be a police officer).
So I ended up hanging out with another guy who seemed to fit the requirements that the other guy didn’t have; he was smart, witty, average looking, came from a middle class background, went to university, was not engaged or associated with criminal people or people who did shady things, and he was honest. But I did not feel the same fiery intensity of love that I felt with the other person. This was has a kind heart, and on eof the reasons why I decided to get more involved with this guy was to make myself forget the previous guy.This present guy is relaxed, polite, engaging, caring, and we aren’t really “dating” but hanging out more. I spent more time with this guy than the previous and there is a greater sense of companionship and friendship. I had to prove to myself that I was not going to fall for a control freak and that I was in control of my destiny and know that there are alternatives. But in some ways, I am wondering whether it is a mistake. What do you think? The previous guy gave me a blatantly outrageous ultimatum, telling me that I should not hang out with him unless I considered marrying him one day (which was too early for me to even know).
I’m wondering whether I am doing the right thing.
What She Got Dat I Don’t Got???????????????????????????…
OKAY SO SEE DER WUZ DIS GUY AND HE WAS ALL NERDY AND GEEKY AND UGLY!!! (HE HAD BRACES, HE WAS SKINNY, PALE, AND HAD A SQUEAKY VOICE! LOOOL) LOL! I REMEMBER I USED 2 GET MA BOYZZZZZZZZZZZ TO BEAT HIM UP REAL GOOD EVERY SINGLE DAY LOL! ONCE I EVEN FLUSHED HIS HEAD IN DA TOILET LOL! BUT DEN HE CAME BACK AND NOW HE’S ALL HAWTTTT!!!! (MUSKULAR, TAN, GOTS STRAIGHT WHITE TEETH, AND HIS VOICE IS DEEPER) AND NOW HE CAN BEAT UP MA BOYZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ! NEWAYZ SO I WAS LIKE “YOU HAWTTT!!!!” BUT HE DOESN’T LIKE MEEEEE
INSTEAD HE’S IN LOVE WITH HIS BEST FRIEND! HE’S ALWAYS BEINGGGG REALLY SWEET 2 HER AND ONCE I SAW SHE WAS CRYING ABOUT SOMETHING AND HE WAS JUST HOLDING HER AND I GOT SOOOO MAD!!!! DAT SHOULD HAVE BEEN MEEEE!!!! SO ONE DAY I WAS TIRED OF HIM PLAYING HARD TO GET (HE IS RIGHT?????) AND I MESSAGED HIM ON FACEBOOK SAYING “IF YUU DON’T GET WITH MEEEE DEN I’M GONNA GET MA BOYZZZZZZZZZZZ TO BEAT UP YUR NASTY GIRL!” N DEN DIS IS WHAT HE REPLIED:
If you do so much as to lay ONE FINGER on her tell your “boyzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz” that they are gonna have to go through me! And also, she’s a black belt so I don’t think your “boyzzzzzzzzzzzzzz” will be able to do anything to her anyways. Also, I just wanna get one thing straight. You idiots put me through so much crap and let me tell ya, you ARE NOT going to do the same thing to her. I don’t give a crap what you want to put me through but there is no possible way you’re gonna do the same thing to her. You know why you can’t stand her? Because she’s beautiful, sweet, funny, smart (and she’s the only girl I’ve seen who can eat 20 hot dogs in one sitting and I really find that cool!) and all the things you will NEVER EVER be. So don’t ask your “boyz” to hurt her because they are just asking to get personally beat up by me.”
AND DEN I WAS SOOOO HART-BROKEN DAT I GOT INTO HIS BFF’S FACEBOOK ACCOUNT CUZ MA BOYZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ DID SOME SPYING AND TOLD ME HE WAS TAKING HER OUT SATURDAY NIGHT SO DA DAY AFTER I GOT INTO HIS BFF’S FACEBOOK ACCOUNT AND FOUND A MESSAGE THAT SHE 2 ONE OF HER FRIENDS TALKING ABOUT DA DATE:
he told me he wanted to show me something, and so he took me to the roof of his favorite hangout (it had an awesome view!!!!!) and he started telling me stuff like how he always used to come up there after he was bullied (I don’t know if I mentioned this, but he was physically bullied pretty much everyday before) and just look at the stars. And then I told him how I remembered that and then we laughed about some other times. Then all of a sudden he started playing with my hair and told me (in a really soft voice) “you were always there for me.” Then I looked up and I realized that our faces were so close they were almost touching, and I could practically smell his breath (which thankfully was minty fresh!
haha). Then he started to lean towards me but I pulled away (remember, this was before I realized I liked him!) And then he pulled back too and was quiet for a while. Then he said “promise you’ll always be my best friend, just like I’m promising I’ll always be yours.” Then I promised, and he sighed and said in kind of a flat tone, like he was upset or something, “yup. just best friends.” I opened my mouth to say something, but it was getting late and we had to get home. So, he climbed down the ladder from the roof, but (of course!) the stupid ladder had to fall down! So I asked him to put it back but then (he had almost like a sparkle in his eyes) he said “nah! just jump! I’ll catch you!” of course I was like “are you INSANE?!?!” and then he’s like “come on! trust me!” and something was telling me to jump so I reluctantly did (really freaked out the entire time, let me just get that out there!) and turns out he actually caught me easily! Then he said “what’d I tell ya?” Then we looked into each others’ eyes and then he finally put me down and we left.
DATZ NAWT REALLY DAT ROMANTIC RIGHT???? I MEAN ITZ SOOOOO OBVIOUS HE’S JUST TRYING TO MAKE MEEE JEALOUS RIGHT??????? SO BASED ON WHAT I TOLD YUUUUU DOES HE LOVE ME OR DA SKUNKBAG????? AND PLZ PLZ PLZ TELL ME DAT DAT DATE WASN’T DAT ROMANTIC AT ALL RIGHT??????
21 minutes ago – 4 days left to answer.
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WHAT MAKES YUUUUU THINK DAT DER D8 WAS ROMANTIC HUH????? I PERSONALLY DON’T SEE DA ROMANCEEEE AT ALL WHEN I FLUSHED HIS HEAD IT WAS MORE ROMANTIC LOL
Those Of You Who Have To Help Customers At Your Job, What’s Your Pet Peeve?
What are your biggest pet peeves?
I work for a manufacturing company, in the office. One of my jobs is to answer the phones and take orders. We sell products to schools and it’s normally a teacher ordering our products. These are my pet peeves when on the phone with a customer:
- They haven’t figured out what they want before they call. They make you wait for 5 mins while they hum and look at our catalog or website.
-They don’t know the shipping address or phone number. Their credit card is in the car and you have to wait while they go get it.
-They speak very soft or like they have a mouth full of marbles. Or they have you on speaker phone and continue to have another conversation going on with someone beside them.
-They complain about the price or the shipping cost or tell you your product sucks.
-They don’t know the model number so they guess and end up ordering the wrong thing.
-They call you every day to see where the package is and complain that it’s taking too long.
It feels good to vent sometimes! Your turn.
Our Father’s Last Dying Breeze–comment, Critique?
Our Father’s Last Dying Breeze
Withered, withering people in the trees
No better than the Autumn’s dying leaves
Crumpling in the saddening soft rain
Living a life hiding their hidden pain
Paradox exists amongst the branches
As their weathered hands constantly wrenched
To hope, to life, to better sunny days
When their stronger bodies could yell in praise
But the glass which is life now sits half gone
With clouds hiding the piercing helpful sun
Some hands let go, for the strain is too hard
Others grip tighter, keeping a strong guard
A sharp wind approaches bearing them down
A few let go to ultimately drown
A sea of lifelessness exists below
The last grip against the relentless tow
Brothers and sisters fall to the abyss
The breeze blows harder trying not to miss
Any life form naked within the trees,
The way of our father’s last dying breeze
I Broke My Lg Phone Internal Screen The Whole Soft Ware Is Working Perfectly But I Cant See Anythng Wt Cn I Do?
please i need ur help its so dear to me!!!! :,(
Older Man I Know Got Tipsy & Started Acting All Hyper Around Me. Was He Coming Onto Me?
My friend seems to think he has a “soft spot” for me because he’s always giving me his jacket & giving compliments, but the other night he was there & he got a bit tipsy. We were outside when it started raining. We were under a small shelter, & he came up to it, but walked up to me & stood millimetres away, his face in my face, & said “Am I too close, sorry?” smiling in a jokey way. He also kept doing silly things to make us laugh, & stood next to me. He lifted up his top a couple of times, in a jokey way (but he’s not a vain guy at all, he was just messing around). My friend thought he was sort of coming onto me from his behaviour. He also asked about this guy who likes me, saying “So what does he say to you?” then put his cap sideways pretending to be him & saying…”R, you are looking fine!”
Before he got tipsy he walked up to us to say hi & said he liked my hair. Later he said he preferred my hair like that & talked about how he used to have really curly hair – much better, curlier ringlets than mine (in a jokey, teasing way). He also asked to touch it. At the end of the night he teased me about how I thought he once said he was 10 years older than he is, & cried on his friends shoulder saying “she used to like me then”. Does he want me to like him? He’s in his 30s. i’m 22. I know he was acting immature that night, but usually we all sit & talk together.
What Do You Think Of The Name Damian & What Middle Name?
Hello all!!
I am pregnant with my 1st and have found out we’re having a boy…
After months & months of trying to find a baby boy’s name.. hubby & I have seemed to agree on the name “Damian”. We like the meaning “to tame” & find it to be quite masculine, yet soft, which we like.
My question is… how do you feel about the name “Damian”?
Also… what middle name?????????
I want something quite short, & we were thinking “Levi”.
Any input is appreciated!!
If it helps… my name is Danielle & my husband’s is Anthony.

